Thursday, August 21, 2008

empty playground (haiku)

empty playground
cold wind rides the
swing alone


Joy Leftow said...

Beautiful and moving as always Lanie. You continue to excel,
Love you,

Will said...

Wonderful imagery, Lanie. The haiku is traditionally supposed to talk of the seasons, and this one marvellously conjures up the scene plus the feelings of winter. The only thing is, a haiku proper follows a very strict pattern, 17 syllables spread across three lines, 5 + 7 + 5, a bit like this:

If I weren't so poor
Ugly and untalented
I'd be quite a catch!

except it's not supposed to be silly like my one. Hope you don't mind me mentioning it.
Much love,